Your Stage : Cafe Talk by Tim Bragg

Tim Bragg

Cafe Talk

I do not get it, the same company looked at this log line eight times on Friday, and two more times tonight, what could they possibly be looking for?

LOGLINE:

An unlucky in love man sets out in quest of his soul mate after meeting the girl of his dreams, realizing there is no chemistry between them. While searching, he struggles with his own sexuality and discovers himself and his own happiness.

Leonardo Ramirez

Tim Bragg In reading it, there doesn't seem to be any stakes involved. I would consider adding that, shortening and perhaps following this formula. “After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

Hope this helps.

Zachary Lee Antle

Sounds like an interesting concept tho, I love stories like that! I’m interested to know more about it if that matters lol

Tim Bragg

Thanks Leonardo. Zachary, the script is available to read here on Stage 32.

Leonardo Ramirez

You're very welcome Tim Bragg All the best to you!

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