the dogman Logline : A simple tri-generational Viking grandfather, father and son escape the floods in South Michigan, unwittingly unleashing a Viking Ritual of the Nine Noble Rules. They go north, only to be persecuted by a psychotic neo-Nazi gang leader, after the grandfather and son are murdered, a Viking demonic spirit is unleashed within the father.
This is pretty jumbled. I assume this is present day, not a story of Vikings? I would not use “Viking” to refer to modern day characters. The term trigenerational is not a common term and used in a sentence with bad grammar. I’d avoid referring to you family that way.
Rewrite it to make it about one character— the one who isn’t killed. So then it’s more streamlined to follow.
>> After the murders of a man’s father and son, he enacts vengeance with the aid of an ancient Viking demonic spirit.
If you have strong ties to Viking lore and heritage, I’m curious about choosing to make your villain a neo-nazi. The Nazi identity was tied to idealized Germanic and Aryan roots, overlapping with Viking mythology. (Mythology depicted in Richard Wagner’s Ring Cycle, for instance.) Is this dealt with in the story? Your hero and villain could be two sides of the same coin. Two conflicting interpretations of Viking ideals. If you’re not touching on this, I wonder why choose a neo-nazi villain.
Also, the term demonic has a negative connotation, which suggests your hero should not trust this avenging spirit. Is it a bad idea for him to join forces with the demon? Is it a “deal with the devil” with negative consequences?