Hi here is the ending of a letter I am writing to send off to investors and sales agents. My wife keeps saying it sounds like I am saying my film is a terrible! I am not sure I agree but I figured I would ask.
"I shot this version over the course of a couple of months to demonstrate what it sounds like and can look like. This is to show it is watchable and dynamic but of course it is not a finished product, it needs pickups, editing and refining."
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How about this:
This version was shot over several months to illustrate its tone and visual style. It’s meant to show its potential, though it’s still a rough cut that needs pickups and polishing.”
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Lose "watchable" not a good look, call it a "work in progress", not not-finished, needs... imho.