Hello! This is my debut screenwriting project, and I’m excited to hear your feedback. All the artwork was created with AI, as I don’t have a team—I’m working solo on the script.
Logline:
A group of high school graduates gets stranded in a snowstorm and stumbles upon a village cut off from modern civilization. When they accidentally disrupt a local sacrificial ritual, night descends into terror as glowing red eyes and the haunting howls of wolves signal an ancient, deadly force.
Synopsis :
During their final winter break, a busload of high school graduates is caught in a blizzard and forced to take shelter in a remote village untouched by electricity or modern technology. At first, the villagers seem calm and welcoming, even when the students inadvertently interrupt a mysterious sacrificial ceremony. But as night falls, the peaceful facade crumbles: glowing red eyes pierce the darkness, wolf-like howls echo through the snow-covered woods, and an ancient, malevolent force reveals itself. The students must navigate the village and survive the night, facing horrors far beyond their understanding, in a chilling tale of suspense and supernatural terror.
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Vadim Nikulin Congrats on your debut project that’s a great step. The setup is really effective: a snowstorm, isolation, and a village cut off from modern life immediately creates a strong atmosphere. The idea of accidentally disrupting a ritual is a solid inciting incident and naturally leads into the horror.
The imagery of the glowing red eyes and wolf-like presence is striking and gives it a clear genre identity.
If I had one note, I’d be curious to see a bit more specificity around the central character or emotional anchor who are we really following, and what’s at stake for them personally within the group? That could make the tension even stronger.
Overall, it feels like a classic survival-horror setup with a lot of potential, especially if the tone leans fully into the isolation and psychological fear.
Thank you very much. The thing is, we are dealing with a group of school kids, each with their own thoughts in their heads—some are scared, some will try to play the hero. A mix of personalities should produce a compelling outcome. I also write them not as typical clichés where one of them is a "superhero" who fears nothing, but rather as kids who are all afraid, each experiencing their fear in their own way. After all, in the moment, the "forest" will feel very close, and they will have to face it head-on.
You may have multiple kids, but make one the hero. It will improve your writing to give them an arc. Something to learn over the course of the film.
48 of your words becomes 39 of your words and crisper.
High school graduates caught in a snowstorm stumble upon a village cut off from modern civilization and accidentally disrupt a sacrificial ritual. As night descends, glowing eyes and the howls of wolves’ signal terror from an ancient, deadly force.