I’m currently participating in the Vertical Microdrama Challenge and would love feedback on my logline and hook for THE RECORD OF ASH.
Logline:
When a veteran government archivist discovers that a twelve-year-old witness is marked for permanent disappearance, he falsifies her death record and races against a surveillance state determined to erase the child he risked everything to save.
Hook:
He declared her dead. Now he has six hours to keep her alive.
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Sounds great!