Anything Goes : Calling all community for help! by Dominic Matich

I need people to read the first 30 pages of my script SHARPTOP. I'll read yours back if you want. Just need new opinions. I have a meeting in a few weeks and I want as many opinions as I can get, It's awesome so far. Please take a look at it. The PDF is on my wall.. Just want to know what you think.