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DOLL HOUSE
By Daniel Lokey

GENRE: Horror
LOGLINE: BUNCH OF SPOOKY STUFF I was thinking of shooting this myself so there are production notes. Very unprofessional. you get what you pay for. disregard shot ideas. I tell you what was fun was the directors commentary for CHARADE the old Audrey Hepburn Cary Grant flick, the writer and director arguing over wether the director took the writers suggested shots.

SYNOPSIS:

the HOUSE OF DREAM Woman drives a car down north magnolia, (we shoot the same stretch along the old old folks home, shoot from both sides so it looks like all that grass is on both sides of her and she is kinda trapped) she gets a phone call so she pulls over and talks. JESSICA Yes.. yes, I am .. I should be there in about half an hour... no.. I am looking forward to it... can't it wait, you know how I love surprises, oh... allright, tell them my talk will be on dialectical surealism. SHE TURNS AND LOOKS OUT THE WINDOW and gives a long reaction shot JESSICA I... I will have to call you back (slow gradual smile as if she is grasping at memories) Jessica gets out of the car, puts her cell phone in a purse (now she is full out grinning) She moves away from the car (we shoot all this at the old Edgemore parking lot, shoot with and without the big building. Cut to old victorian house on central ave lemon grove Jessica walks up to the house, she shows some trepidition, almost thinking of turning around and going back then she shakes herself and knocks. (lets go for a overhead boom shot here shot of the knocker, her phone goes off and she doesent check it she turns it off and puts it back in her purse. Int. door opens YOUNG GIRL Can I help you? JESSICA oh, MAYBEE, I hope so. I . I wonder if I could walk around your yard, your house! Its so loveley I, .. hold on., let me start over. Are your parents home? GIRL SHAKES HER HEAD I dont know how or when but sometime .. (long pause as she reflects) WHEN I was small. I had a dollhouse .. so long ago. But but it really was this house, whoever built the doll house or ,, perjaps it was a model by an architect. . it must have been from the same original blue prints. Honestly.. ( she is almost jumping up and down with excitement) ask me to describe anything inside. GIRL SMILES AND GESTURES A WELCOMING WITH HER ARMS AND GUIDES HER THRU THE HOUSE wow, lets do something wild here, lets shoot macro a childs doll house with all the fixxings LA JOLLA POTTERY BARN doll houses, , and green screen the two walking thru , shoot it both ways with a regualr house w/tv etc. in case it doesent work. ,) so all of her dialog from here needs to be based on macro shots, but not like she is actually seeing them, so like “here,, is where the piano was,, and a wall of books, ooo! And this was the nuresery, dreamy soft focus when they get to the kitchen, JESSICA So sorry I havent introduced myself Jessica, and you are? LITTLE GIRL I am so pleased you visited Jessica , wont you have some tea Its fresh, we are having a tea party she hands her a cup and they continue the tour, ( so the whole kitchen sequence is a break out of the macro photography, its a real kitchen lets have the first stirings of ominouse music once she gets the cup of coffee but not overdue it. Now she walks thru where she came thru before and we see how it really is. She sips tea and points to a wall. JESSICA this.. this was what I think they called a solarium, it.. oh I'm sorry, I should have asked how long have you lived here? Do you know the houses history? little girl smiles and nods Jessica looks a little confused but continues JESSICA The solarium would have been the centerpiece of the home. It .. the light would come shining thru and it,, its all been walled off, I wonder,, SHE FEELS ALONG THE WALL, AND SEEMS TO STAGGER SLIGHTLY, The little girl walks to a curtain and pulls it back gesturing for Jessica to enter Jessica enters the darkness she sniffs , what the smell are you remodeling? Now Jessicas P.O.V. As she turns a corner onto nightmareville , blood body parts, plastic taped to the walls a large table with six dead women all dusty and cob webs dry zombie looking tea cup shatters on floor Jessica wheels about staggering, also its clear now that she has been drugged and looks at the girl she crumbles into a chair and the girl scoots her up to the table cut back and forth from dry dusty zombies, (flour pancake faces) fresh red blood splattered walls, eye ball shots of terrified silently screaming paralyzed jessica as little girl picks up tea cup and sets it down in front of her. Little girl smiles and says Her name is Jessica say hello everyone (ok. I honestly dont know what would be scarier if they start to move slowly or all jerk their heads at once so lets shoot it both ways) It would be cool though it one of them could do a dead girl ballet dance like in LIVIDE (French Horror film that got pulled from youtube so I have no links now) JESSICA now full on into the camera) first I vote for Obama , now this...

Javier Ronceros

Very Intriguing, good visuals.

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