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A high school graduate embarks on a seven-day journey to Tahiti island where her sexual desires will be awakened by a handsome wealthy stranger.
SYNOPSIS:
“Paradise 69” is about four high school graduates embarking on a seven-day journey to Tahiti where they are confronted by men who swamp them with attention. Before they know what’s going on, they find themselves taken advantage of at “The Paradise Resort.” A woman, Lexy, reels them in at the bar and invites them to a private party. Scarlett is propositioned by a wealthy Iranian, Sam Mijan, who pulls out all the stops to impress and overwhelm her. Beckoned to his lavish house, Sam presents his business, “Collective Holdings Inc,” who hire models to film videos of sexual acts.
Scarlett wakes up back at her resort unable to remember the night before. What might have happened in those lost, dark hours? She is sent a link to her new online profile inclusive of a sex video which has gone viral. Upset, calling the police does not work. The girls head to another party where Lexy proves her innocence and manipulates them once more with spiked drinks. Now with her friends missing, her passport confiscated, Scarlett is the property of the Collective.
Scarlett realizes she is in deeper than she could ever have imagined and that she must do something before it is too late. When the police arrive in response to a commotion, Scarlett seizes her chance. Will she get away or be floundered by bankrolled cops? Can the trafficking ring be exposed and Scarlett come away free with justice served? Defined by the Department of Homeland Security as “modern day slavery,” Paradise 69 charts the horrific practice of sex trafficking as four girlfriends fall foul to manipulative drugs on a trip to Tahiti.
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Hello Ed. Your story sounds very intriguing, it's a nice concept. Just the logline looks more like a synopsis than a logline. Here's a suggestion: "When a 18 year old recent high school graduate becomes enthralled by a good looking guy during a trip to Tahiti, (from here on, you can add something real bad that may happen to Scarlett because of the secrets this stranger wants to keep hidden.)" The further details can be written in the synopsis.
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I’ve updated the logline. Thank you. I used to have it short. One sentence. Went through that website Inktip and they said it was two short.
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What are the stakes, Ed Silva?
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