What Happened in Coldbranch was a fun, suspenseful read, @Joe! The script is gripping. I kept wanting to find out what was going on. I think you did a great job on the dialogue! I like both of your scripts, especially this one!

Page 1 (start): Put the first scene heading in all caps.

Page 1 (toward the start): It says, "Warm eyes and a sharp mind, Sheriff of Coldbranch, Texas Police Department, SHERIFF RUTH CALDER (40s) walks into Ray’s Diner, a bell rings as she walks through the door and she smiles at RAY (70s)."

– You put "Ray’s Diner" in the scene heading, so you could just put "walks into the diner."

– You put "walks" twice, so you could change "walks into Ray’s Diner, a bell rings as she walks through the door and she smiles at RAY (70s)" to "strolls into the diner/enters the diner, a bell rings as she walks through the door and she smiles at RAY (70s)."

Page 1 (toward the end): "Ruth looks shocked."

– Instead of telling us she looks shocked, show us in an action.

Page 2 (toward the start): Ray says, "I dunno but he wouldn’t pick up when I called"

– Add a period.

Page 2 (middle): "Ruth walks over to the booth Eli is sitting at and she starts to talk to him."

– You don't have to put "and she starts to talk to him." You can just have Ruth talk.

– Same thing on page 4 (toward the start) when it says, "Ruth doesn’t know how to respond to this at first, then she begins to speak again."

Page 2 (near the end): "Ruth is lost for words at how he seems so nonchalant despite this being his first sighting in years: W-Where have you been? Nobody has heard from you in 7 years."

– Add a space between the action line and dialogue.

Page 3 (toward the middle): Ruth says, "So you’ve spoken to him?" then it says, "ELI (cutting her off): Have you ever been to Wyoming? Beautiful country out there."

– You can put "--" at the end of Ruth's dialogue instead of "(cutting her off)."

Near the start of page 3, it says, "Ruth furrows her brow, suspicious that he suddenly decided to get out of town to find himself as a 28 year old," so you don't need to put "left town to find himself as a 28 year old" (middle of page 3).

Thank you so much! I really really appreciate your kind words, and thank you for your help with the more technical sides of my writing, I definitely needed to proof read it one more time before publishing haha.

You're welcome, @Joe. This would be an incredible feature film!