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DEEP STATE
By Kenneth George
At a private neurological institute, a sleep researcher’s experimental hibernation drug unleashes an irreversible subconscious state that spreads through patients, while the institute races to bury the truth before the outbreak, lawsuits, and police investigation destroy everything.
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Set across an 8-episode psychological horror thriller, this series follows Dr. Naomi Vale at the prestigious Halcyon Neurological Institute ... Available on request
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Sounds intense and interesting Kenneth George. I'd consider streamlining the logline a bit - shorten it and make it more concise. Who is the protagonist of the story and what is his/her goal?
“After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
Leonardo Ramirez The TV series thrives on tension and uses a dual-protagonist structure, with Dr. Naomi as the primary protagonist and the detective as the deuteragonist closing in. At 37 words, the logline is within range for a complex TV drama ( https://www.finaldraft.com/blog/how-to-craft-the-perfect-tv-series-logline ).
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