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A vampire offers a slave his services for the exchange of food. (5 pages. 1 Location. 3 actors)
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Jean-Pierre - I really like this. I think this is substantive enough to be built into the climactic scene of a full-length feature film, or at least an episode of a series. I understand sometimes it makes sense to write for a short or purposely scale down a budget...but man, I think this could really be something bigger. Nicely done.
Wow, I wish I was told when someone leaves a comment on my script. Thanks, Mark! I wrote this during the first round of the 48 hour NYC challenge that's going on right now.
Thanks Lisa. Yeah it got me third place.
Jean-Pierre - so did you just have 48 hours to think this up and execute? This is cool in general, and especially cool if you just sorta whipped it up on the spot.
Hey Mark, sorry for the delay in response. I think I'll put in a suggestion to the MODS to notify us when people comment on our scripts. Yes, I came up with this is 48 hours. My prompts were Historical Fiction (I kind of botched that up but they still accepted it) an underground cellar, and a wallet. So this is what I came up with. Last week my prompts were action/adventure, an apple orchard, and an inflatable mattress. That one was a lot tougher but I've been getting a lot of good feedback on the forums for it. I may post it on here later today,
Thanks Oriel. I've sent them the request for the notification. We'll see where that goes, lol.
Another good, well-written one. Didn't see the end coming, but it didn't exactly grab me either. Is there a possible way to suggest the end without giving it away? Perhaps I missed the foreshadowing if it was in there?
Also agree with the comment that this could even be a full-feature. Perhaps even with sequels, if it sells well.
Yeah, I've been told to foreshadow more on this too. I have him say "I smell a liar" or something, but I have to admit that's not enough. I'll think of something else. I just don't know what human characteristic would hint at "werewolf".
Awesome one! About the foreshadow thing, maybe that would be easier to do with the costume design, or the way the actor moves maybe. I thought the dialogue was very well made =)
Thanks Diego. I'm glad you enjoyed it.