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When her younger sister is kidnapped, a woman with a hidden superpower will stop at nothing to save her, causing an ensemble of unsuspecting characters to collide.
SYNOPSIS:
What if a superhero movie was written through the lens of say… Tarantino.
Think X-Men meets Pulp Fiction.
Synopsis:
Set against the neon grime of 1980’s Detroit, Pinball follows two sisters with supernatural abilities-- Lola, an exotic dancer with the ability to take over people’s bodies through touch. And her 10-year-old sister Stormy, who has the power to make people EXPLODE at will. On Halloween night, Stormy is kidnapped while trick-or-treating, sending Lola on a desperate search to find her—even as she herself is taken!
Their captor—a man who calls himself “The Dogman of Michigan,” a self-proclaimed monster hunter who has spent his life searching for the supernatural. He keeps Lola and Stormy in separate locations, planning to exploit their powers for profit. Lola is locked in a basement prison, in a cell next to the Dogman’s own brother, Charlie—a man-child with powerful electromagnetic abilities. Charlie’s cell is cluttered with nerd memorabilia, designed to keep his powerful mind distracted. Amongst his various toys is-- a stolen, antique pinball machine.
Backed into a corner, Lola’s powers evolve—Allowing her to possess the body of a pizza delivery driver named Willy, merely by holding an item with emotional significance—Willy’s mood ring.
To save herself, and find Stormy, Lola pilots Willy’s body (amongst others) through the underbelly of Detroit, enlisting the help of his co-worker Roxy, and a mysterious vigilante known only as, “The Guy.” The story culminates in an explosive showdown at a warehouse, where Stormy’s devastating powers are fully unleashed. Together, the sisters and their misfit allies must defeat the Dogman and his rag-tag army, regaining their freedom.
Characters:
· Lola: A woman burdened by a power she never asked for. Beneath her quiet strength lies a deep moral struggle, and beneath that, an unshakable devotion to protect what little good remains in her world—especially her sister.
· Stormy: A graphic-novel obsessed 10-year-old in a panda costume who becomes the most dangerous person in the story. A haunting reversal of childhood wonder. She’s not just the prize to be saved—she’s a force of nature coming into her own.
· Willy: A pizza delivery driver who becomes an unexpected hero. Initially portrayed as a directionless, marijuana-smoking young man, Willy becomes instrumental in Lola’s rescue when she inhabits his body. Through Lola’s influence, he discovers a capacity for courage and selflessness.
· The Dogman Of Michigan: A self-proclaimed monster hunter whose obsession with supernatural beings has driven him into madness. His anger with a world that labeled him “crazy,” has fueled the creation of an entire criminal enterprise whose purpose is to exact his will, and use the sisters as both weapons and trophies.
Themes:
· The monsters within, and the monsters without.
· Is life ruled by fate, or by chance?
· The weight of responsibility—to others, not just ourselves.
· Power as a burden, not a reward.
Visual Style:
Pinball evokes the bold, colorful, and often violent style of graphic novels. A pulp grittiness, splashed with superhero movie fun. The script mirrors the neon chaos of the inside of a pinball machine-- story lines shooting this way and that, colliding in abrupt violence. Lola’s body swaps translate as fun physical comedy, popping between people in short succession. Descriptions of light, sound, and physical sensation are carefully crafted to immerse the reader in this arcade-like world.
Why It Will Succeed:
Pinball bursts with kinetic energy and bold personality. It’s a genre-bending showcase for visionary filmmakers and character-driven actors alike. Every page explores character, and celebrates one-on-one conversational dialogue—not just spectacle. Created specifically for audiences who desperately need a new take on the superhero genre.
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