"The evil Persian King Xerxes falls in love with a Jewisch girls who is made queen and saved her people by being slaughtered by Haman, the kings Chief Minister."

We now how resentless Xerxes is. An other slight problem is that by introducing Xerxes in the beginning of the sentence you tell us he is the protagonist while in fact the Jewish girls is. It is her great sacrifice that leads her people out of darknes..

Right! Gotcha Rutger! I was debating if I should've mentioned him later in the log-line or put him in first. Thank you!

You could make an account on www.logline.it , post the logline and see what the pro's come up with. I mean DGP, Nir Shelter and Richiev.

Got it.