Composing : Composition recommendations!? by Shahriar Vaghfrahmani

Well, I like it. I think it tells the story well. Matched to the tensions and the releases.

I like that it's not in the overused key of D-minor. However, the lack of dissonance dissipates the tension of the scene, and it doesn't leave the key of F-minor.

I'd like to hear tonal & harmonic ambiguity in the the early part of the scene, where we don't know what key it's in, paralleling the uncertainty of the characters in the scene. (This was a trick commonly used in classic movies of the 1950s-'70s to convey suspense, often employing the 12-tone technique of Arnold Schoenberg.) Then bring in the consonance and tonal grounding at the end with the scene's resolution, which will make the tonality stronger. If the music is 100% tonal and consonant, it diminishes its strength.

I like the tension at the beginning, though the low synth part - I feel - gets in the way.

I would try using a string bass, — Noir style - since it is an outdoor scene. Something where the high orchestration you have stands out more.

I like what you did here - maybe slight different sounds to blend your writing style to the outdoors. Maybe it’s my dry type indie sound(s). - smiles

From what I’ve been learning from Michael Whittaker’s online classes and free Friday class,

I would add more tension where he’s mentioning she needs to “relax her hands.” There’s no music there showing the emotion she’s trying to portray in the scene. (In my opinion, again m)

I think there’s music there, but it’s heading towards the next scene..

I liked the music towards the end - adding the Love themes.

I missed an emotional moment on this one competition I did last year, though it’s going into another scene - so it’s hard to know how to write in these quick seconds also ! The guy says .. “ did I miss something”? So I left it open as sometimes Silence can say a lot too.

(It’s the Spitfire competition )

https://youtu.be/JnTUtLeL_YE?feature=shared

I may have not implemented all of Michael strategies, (yet) though he writes music in detail for 15 second intervals, it seems. It’s a lot to do., but it’s what I’ve been learning from him.

He’s The 30 year Composer - (Smiles )

… his Music background along with his details are really great. He has a short videos now on YouTube..

Michael Whittaker

http://www.scoreCraftAcademy.com

Kerry Kennard

www.KerryKennard.com

I love the music at the beginning. It goes well with the scene. I think the music starting at 1:06 was a little loud and blocked out a bit of the dialogue. The music at 1:34 was better as it wasn't overpowering the dialogue in the scene. The rest of the music in the scenes worked well, I thought.