Screenwriting : Looking for feedback on my animated pilot script “Creekbound” (supernatural adventure) by Michele Sandretto

Hey everyone,

I’m Michele, an 18-year-old screenwriter from Romania, working on an original animated supernatural adventure series called "Creekbound."

Logline:

After his ninth move, teen Mac lands in sleepy Pinebridge and gets dragged into a kid-run treehouse complex hidden in the woods, where rival factions battle for control just as an ancient supernatural force begins to wake beneath the forest.

I’ve uploaded the pilot script to the Loglines section of my Stage 32 profile and would really appreciate any feedback, especially on the logline and the first 10 pages (structure, pacing, dialogue, whatever jumps out at you).

Happy to swap reads or give feedback on your loglines/pages as well.

You can find it on my profile under Loglines, or here: https://www.stage32.com/profile/1352863/Screenplay/Creekbound

Thanks in advance to anyone who checks it out!