Hey all. Any writers interested in swapping scripts for feedback? Nothing too crazy. Maybe a page or two of notes. I'm preparing my latest script for market and would love to get some eyes on it from other writres.
Title: James 1:3
Genre: Thriller
Logline: Convinced the iron-fisted pastor’s daughter has kidnapped her five year-old son, an obedient parishioner takes matters into her own hands when police decide to pursue other leads.
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Hi, Jamie Taylor Maybe update your logline a bit first to explain what the story is about more what does it mean to take matters into her own hands and what does it mean when police pursue other leads? Your logline should not be secretive but explain the full concept of the story here is a link for you to help is you so desire https://www.scriptreaderpro.com/script-logline/
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Good note, Kacee. Gave it a tweak to provide more context.
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Cool - How is this from a different angle? When a faithful church-goer believes her young son was kidnapped by her iron-fisted pastor's psychotic daughter, she takes matters into her own hands while the police pursue other leads. ( your genre is a thriller but there really is not anything in the logline which yells thriller)