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Dru Holley

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Should I change my title from "Off The Strip" to "Surviving Vegas"

Anthony Moore

Unfortunately you haven't provided enough information to make an accurate assessment. A logline or synopsis would provide at least some guidance as to what your screenplay is about.

Dru Holley

SYNOPSIS: Three strippers work the club scene and live their lives as locals. Lisa, Miley and Jasmine's lives are all connected with the criminal activity of an Hispanic drug lord, Miguel, and his sons. Miley has problems with men, always choosing abusive men that keep her from moving out of the Vegas life for good. Lisa, new girl, is seduced by the dangerous life of drug abuse. Jasmine longs for the good life of designer things and fast cash, but she searches for true love. Fast forward two years later, and their lives run parallel, caught up in a dangerous drug family in their own separate ways. They all come together again and fall apart in a night that leads to destruction, violence and death off the strip in sin city. Some come to Vegas for fun. Some come for a life. But does it all lead to death?

Pierre Langenegger

That's up to you, which one fo you prefer?

Beth Fox Heisinger

Between the two, "Surviving Vegas" has more of an emotional engaging quality. Whereas "Off the Strip" sounds a bit "off the cuff" too hammy, too "reality TV-ish" perhaps? But, I completely agree, it's really up to you, Dru. You know the story best and the story intentions. We don't. Perhaps keep trying more titles. Maybe there's something even better? More fitting. Keep going. Push further. ;) A side note, just food for thought; your female characters and their motivations/lives seem to only revolve around men. Perhaps consider that each has her own goals; her own purpose; her own agency outside of men. Searching for true love is nice, but again, it's all about the man. They also seem to be "reacting" to this world; passive; and not "active." Anyway, I wish you the best of luck with it. :)

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