Screenwriting : Would you watch these movies? by Shelly Paino

Shelly Paino

Would you watch these movies?

Please help me try to gauge the strength of these two premises? (I have written them and am about to embark on a page one rewrite on both, but would love to know if they spark your interest.) *"When a small town pastor’s one-time love turned risqué reality star whirls back into his life, he risks his legacy by joining the cast of her reality show in hopes of winning her back." *"Publicly challenged by her jealous rival, a preeminent career coach must protect her reputation by finding a mysterious homeless man an occupation using his hidden talents." Thank you!

Debbie Croysdale

The first sparked my interest, sounds fun and a bit of a wild card. Can visualise some key dramatic moments, and conflicts, with these opposites in the dynamics. The second felt a tad vague, because nothing is known of the man, or of his special skills. I understand he is a mystery man, but small seeds could be planted to kindle more intrigue in him, together with what's at stake if he doesn't gain employment. I realise protagonist will lose face in public, from jealous rival, if he doesn't make the grade.....but I would make stakes higher. It's a great idea, and I'm not picking at the theme, but I found the log line less spicy than the first. (Your question was which one interests.)

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