Summary: The Soul Pulse of Genes
In a dystopian future, Genpiker, a secretive organization, creates genetically engineered teens by transplanting organs from deceased children, whose souls linger in their new bodies. Cassiel, an 18-year-old with haunting memories from his donor, leads a group of nine teens—Liana, Hector, Fria, Cassius, Jen, Noah, Aris, and Jona—trapped in the "Final Testing Grounds," a deadly structure designed to test their loyalty. After their memories are erased, they uncover their purpose: to become obedient soldiers. Guided by Elias, a rogue ex-researcher haunted by guilt, they rebel, navigating treacherous zones—frozen forests, stormy seas, volcanic mountains, and eerie deserts—using psychic powers and donor soul guidance. Facing traps and illusions, they escape after Elias sacrifices himself, leaving the survivors free but marked by their past.
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Thank you very much
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Hello! This is a pretty interesting idea, but I think it needs some refinement to make it more meaningful and dramatic. Why not replace the donor's memories with a second mind that communicates and tries to control the body? And of course, the corporation is doing this to create more effective soldiers with different skills, personalities, and the ability to perform two tasks simultaneously.
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Thanks, Ator, for your good opinion. You’re right. In fact, I’ve written about one of the souls whose organs were transplanted into a person and now tries to take control—or at least torment him mentally. But the main point is that this soul cannot fully take over the body, because several other organs were also transplanted into the same boy, and those other souls don’t blame him the same way. So, unless the other souls agree, he cannot gain full control over the body.
I’ve written about 18 pages in total, with some details, but I couldn’t share the whole thing here. Since it’s my first time writing, I don’t have much experience. My English is weak, and if I had someone like you—or anyone else who really understands screenwriting—to help me, we could easily finish the story together and turn it into something much better.
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Sina Dehghan, Oh, it's cool that your story has characters with multiple personalities in their minds. Unfortunately, I don't know English either, and I use an online translator and neural network translation to communicate on this forum. I'm sure someone will be interested in your story, and you can write a very good script.
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Thank you so much, Ator, for having such a perspective on my screenplay. I hope it’s the same for you.
I’ve also read some of your stories, and they were very helpful to me. I think you didn’t write just one or two, but around 30 screenplay pieces, each showcasing different styles, which really takes a lot of thought and creativity.
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You're welcome, Sina Dehghan.