Anything Goes : New Logline for my erotic feature "Vulgar." by Farook Qais

"A sexually liberated married couple’s open arrangement fractures under jealousy when the husband’s go-to oversteps. A shared love interest however forces them to redefine trust, desire and commitment."

It’s a strong adult premise with real heat, but the logline has very vague phrases in “sexually liberated” and “husband’s go-to” which lack specificity.

The cause-and-effect between jealousy and the love interest isn’t clear. The stakes are thematic instead of dramatic. What's the conflict that leads to reconciliation?

We need a sharper sense of what they stand to lose. It’s a compelling idea, but it needs more precision and clearer escalation.

Also, "Vulgar" lands a tad hard for what sounds like an erotic and mature story centered on the trials of an open marriage.

Good luck.

hey! thank you for taking a look. aren't loglines just "fun"?! very helpful feedback - I'm sure I'll revise again.

Welcome. No, crafting a logline is serious work that takes a lot of effort to make them an effective marketing tool.