Charming pizza master and manager of a local pizza place inherits the head of a multinational company, but when it takes over the presidency has learned that it is a mafia organization and to his colleagues do not like the fact that he is the boss.
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The manager of a local pizza place inherits the presidency of a large corporation, a hidden front for the mafia. How will he survive?
It is a comedy, so you must see it at logline. Regardless of all thank you very much!
Sounds fun. I'd put something like. "A pizza chef and restaurant manager, unwittingly becomes head of an underworld front. Lucky he's a master of his art, and he'd better make sure his new colleagues like their slice."
The manager of a local pizza palace becomes president of a large corporation, a hidden front for the mafia. Comedy ensues as he deftly twists his way through spicy work situations with very hot employees.
You could do something like this... When a charming (small-town?) pizza chef becomes sole heir to a huge corporation, he soon learns that it's corrupt and the mafia will do anything to oust him.
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A bit wordy. Have a look at this one: A pizza maker inherits a company only to discover that the position makes him a mob boss and a target.
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Nice job, Anthony!
A pizza chef unexpectedly inherits a multinational company only to find that that his new 'employees' are Mafia members running a huge money-laundering scam.
A pizza chef unexpectedly inherits a multinational company and he did not know that company is only a cover for mafia dirty money. Other member of Mafia family have orders that they should not reveal his true essence of the job, but pizza chef slowly discover the truth and become a very angry. At the moment he want to give up, but if he will do this, he risk his life and the life of his family. The point is when he discover the truth, he decided to turn whole business legal! This is the story in tree sentence. What do you think now?
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Have you decided to ditch the idea of a logline now? Because that's a synopsis, not a logline. To be honest my version says everything yours does except the bit about his family being in danger. In films about the Mob,it's safe to assume the family of the good guy are going to be in danger so you can probably leave that out. This is a bit longer, but: When a pizza chef who has unexpectedly inherited a multinational company which turns out to be a huge Mafia money laundering scam, he finds himself in a deadly conflict with mobsters who will do anything to stop him turning the business legit.
Hi Anton, this is not a log line, this is what is story about for better understanding. Thank you, I think your log line is a good one!
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Thank you Dan! Today I was a Park Avenue Award Winner at New York Screenplay Contest, with this story!
Well done Stevan!
Thanks Anton!