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When a brilliant but broken scientist unleashes a drug that mimics confidence, his obsession spirals into a citywide crisis—forcing his estranged son and a former employee’s daughter to stop him before his creation destroys them all.
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Victor Evans is a brilliant but emotionally scarred scientist whose traumatic teenage years—marked by relentless bullying and a near-fatal suicide attempt—fueled his obsession with pharmaceutical solutions. After finding refuge at the Helping Hands Institution and being mentored by the compassionate Dr. Charles Grant, Victor dedicates his life to creating a drug that could offer others what he was once given: relief, control, and unshakable confidence.
At just 25, Victor becomes the youngest CEO in the industry, launching Leinad Labs to revolutionize antidepressants. But behind closed doors, he begins developing “C,” a secret experimental drug designed to manufacture confidence itself. What begins as a mission to heal soon warps into a dangerous pursuit of dominance—driven by decades of unresolved trauma and a quietly simmering obsession with Josh, the high school bully who nearly destroyed him.
For years, Victor has tracked Josh from afar, studying his life and quietly hoping success alone might satisfy his lingering resentment. But when his trials drain company resources and desperation sets in, Victor seizes an opportunity: Josh now sits on the board of a powerful pharmaceutical funding body. Banking on the passage of time to conceal his identity, Victor inserts himself into Josh’s orbit, exploiting what he knows to secure critical funding—unaware that reigniting the past will accelerate his descent into obsession.
Years of volatile test trials culminate in tragedy: the death of Victor’s wife and trusted colleague. But when a string of deaths tied to high-end clients from an early private release of “C” threatens to expose him, Victor makes a desperate decision—release "C" publicly. Using an inside contact to bypass regulations, he unleashes the unstable drug, shifting attention away from the trail that leads back to him. Marketed under the alluring name Confidence, the formula spreads like wildfire, triggering manic delusions, psychotic breaks, and a wave of violence across the city.
Meanwhile, Victor’s estranged son, Daniel—recently retired from the Marines—hasn’t seen his father in over a decade. He left at 18, reeling from the death of his mother, harboring resentment toward Victor, and never learning the full truth of what happened. Daniel crosses paths with Selene—the daughter of Dr. Rowan Carter, who died during Trial 3 of Project C as Selene watched. Together, they form an alliance—one that grows increasingly personal—as they race against time to uncover the truth about Confidence, Leinad Labs’ dark history, and the man behind it all. With society unraveling and their lives at stake, they must stop Victor before his obsession consumes everything.
Confidence is a psychological thriller about unhealed trauma, scientific ego, and the fragile line between self-empowerment and self-destruction.
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Hey, Ryan Wilford. I remember reading your other logline. I think this logline is stronger, but I think “his obsession spirals into a citywide crisis” is vague, and I suggest telling how the creation will destroy everyone.
I think you’re on your way to a strong synopsis. I think you said before that the son is the protagonist, so I suggest getting to him quicker in the synopsis. Right now, the synopsis makes it seem like Victor is the protagonist. And the logline makes it seem like the main storyline is Daniel and Selene trying to stop Victor, but that storyline doesn’t show up until near the end of the synopsis.
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Ryan, I like where you're going with this. It's giving LIMITLESS vibes, but there's enough time that has passed from that Bradley Cooper flick that this could work. Just be careful it doesn't become "too" complicated. Because this is pharma and science, there is the capacity for that to happen. If you watch Limitless (if you haven't already) they take the ultimate step back approach and keep it as simplistic as possible. Good luck!
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Maurice Vaughan Hey Maurice,
Thank you so much for the feedback! I really appreciate the detailed notes.
On the Logline: I see your point about "citywide crisis" being vague. I'm intentionally trying to hold back the immediate destructive details of the drug for this initial pitch and logline to maintain the script's core mystery. Once the project is shopped or picked up, I will absolutely detail the destructive impact more specifically.
On the Synopsis: You hit on a crucial element of the script's design! While Daniel is the protagonist whose actions drive the heroic storyline, Victor is the main character and anti-hero. The structure is designed to follow Victor's psychological descent and the origin of the crisis first, making the story feel like it's primarily his for the first two acts. I understand how that shift might feel late, but that perspective is exactly what I'm aiming for.
Thanks again for taking the time to read. I'll take all of this into consideration as I finalize the pitch materials!
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You're welcome, @Ryan. I haven't heard of/seen anything like CONFIDENCE. Can't wait to watch it!
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Jeffrey Wright Thank you, Jeffrey! I definitely take that Limitless comparison as a huge compliment—it's a great benchmark for high-concept thrillers, and I appreciate the warning about avoiding unnecessary complexity with the pharma angle.
I agree they draw similarities on the concept of mental enhancement, but I'm focusing the narrative on the crucial distinction: my film is really exploring the dark side of ego and unhealed trauma, rather than the excitement of a mental superpower. That psychological depth is key.
I'm confident the story is simple and focused on those human consequences. Thanks again for the great insight and encouragement! Good luck as well with any projects you're currently working on!
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