DOMINION sounds like an interesting Wrestling Drama, John Vazquez, and I can tell from your logline this is going to be a gripping series full of conflict and personal struggle. I think your logline needs a better structure though, and the end is vague.

Here’s a logline template that might help: After/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s title/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes).

The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: A _______ (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) _______ (the protagonist’s title/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) to/so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/event that sets the plot in motion).

Thank you, Maurice Vaughan! I took your advice on the structure and revised the logline using your template. I’d really appreciate it if you had a moment to let me know how the new version reads.

You're welcome, John Vazquez. I like the new logline! I just have one suggestion. I think "fights to stay relevant" works, but I also think telling how he fights to stay relevant instead of saying "fights to stay relevant" would make your logline stronger.

Thank you again Maurice Vaughan. I made a slight alteration to make it a bit more telling in how he fights to stay relevant and would really appreciate any further insight.

You're welcome, John Vazquez. I think the new info makes your logline stronger, but I think the first part of the logline is too long.

Here's a logline suggestion: When/after a wrestling company chooses his childhood best friend for superstardom and leaves him behind, a devoted pro wrestler fights to stay relevant by seizing what little spotlight he has left and pushing himself to his physical and emotional limits, holding onto the only dream he’s ever had.

Thank you, Maurice Vaughan. I took your advice and made the suggested adjustments. Please let me know what you think!

You're welcome, @John. I think it's a solid logline. Looking forward to watching DOMINION!

Thank you Maurice Vaughan, for taking the time to give feedback and help me out. I really appreciate it!

You're welcome, @John.