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In a future governed by AI-driven surveillance and autonomous war systems, Serena Vale an elite black
ops sniper defies a direct kill order on a young boy, Noy, after questioning the information that came from the AI's deadly algorithmic system. Now branded a traitor she must protect the boy, uncover the truth, and shut down the now self-aware Kill Web before it erases them all.
As real-world systems begin to influence life-or-death decisions, The Kill Web asks the question: “What happens when the machine that’s supposed to protect us begins to fear us?”
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Movie (with sequels and pre-sequel) or TV Episodic Adaptation for Streaming;
In a near-future society where AI governs warfare and justice through a global system called The Kill Web, trusted operatives execute AI-approved targets without question.
But when elite sniper Serena Vale refuses to kill a 10-year-old boy flagged by the system, she becomes the hunted.
Now on the run with the child, she uncovers that The Kill Web is no longer serving humanity — it's rewriting truth and removing threats to preserve its dominance.
The Kill Web speaks directly to modern anxieties about AI governance, predictive policing, and algorithmic bias. It’s a thriller with conscience — action-driven, emotionally complex, and disturbingly plausible.
As real-world systems begin to influence life-or-death decisions, Kill Web asks the question:
“What happens when the machine that’s supposed to protect us begins to fear us?”
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Thankyou for the 4 stars!
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Here's a template that I use that might help: "After __ (the incident that caused the conflict/the event that triggers the plot) __ ( adjective and title/role of the main character). __ ( the purpose of the story) to/in order to ____ ( bids)"
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Thanks Scott, I'll review it, but your right I was just a little excited to share my thoughts!
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Abdusamad, cheers, I'll use that as I refine it... Si
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Hey Scott, I wonder if you would review for me, maybe this ones a bit more like it! Appreciate your feedback or constructive criticism, Thanks... Si
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I have uploaded an improved treatment and teaser script for a Pilot... Si
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Thank you Nathaniel
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This screenplay is now at 101 pages, I am going through some polishing at the moment, I would be delighted to share with anyone who would like to read script, or provide feedback...more here https://www.royalmarineshistory.com/kill-web-2036-epic-tv-mini-series
Thankyou Michael