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SOUTH BEACH SETUP
By Joanne Groshardt

GENRE: Crime
LOGLINE:

A determine detective goes over the line to solve the murder of his wife only to find out his brother did it.

Bio:

 

ONLINE WITH LOVE in pre-production with William Garcia.

 

Comedy monologue for TV Host Julia Sun to play off-Broadway.

 

CHILDISH THINGS (with Chris Soth) feature is in pre-production in Canada and starts filming in 2014.

 

SAFE WORD will be in distributed in 2014.

 

Three of my shorts have been produced.

 

I've been commissioned to write two shorts, five of my spec scripts have been optioned and have placed at various levels in over 20 contests.

 

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http://www.imdb.com/name/nm1346307/

SYNOPSIS:

The Miami Fingernail Killer is back after five years of silence. His MO--clippings left in the mouths of the women he kills. His latest victim--Detective Frank Pollard’s wife, Officer Rebecca Pollard. Frank was transferred to Narcotics after her death. He wants back in Homicide, but his Lieutenant thinks he’s better off in Narcotics with a rich, Harvard-educated, salad-eating, newbie-partner named Drew. Although it’s against department policy, Frank confides in and finds comfort with a local Madame named Gloria who always smells like the Freesia flower. He sees her every Tuesday at no charge. The two met when her establishment was raided and Frank, after handcuffing her, placed his jacket around her shivering shoulders. Each time he sees her, a cloud of guilt hangs over him with thoughts that he is two-timing his deceased wife. He doesn’t approve of Gloria’s line of business, but she’s not hanging out the “Closed” sign until Frank gives her a ring. But all he gives her is a ladies’ revolver for protection. Her career is on the wrong side of the law. Sometimes he feels like a hypocrite continuing the relationship, but he loves her. Frank gives Iggy, his confidential informant, an unexpected visit to find when and where the next big delivery of ecstasy is to take place. When Iggy refuses to answer the door, he’s threatened with the end of a gun barrel and at the count of “three” to open up or get a visit from the local SWAT. Iggy claims he’s a simple porno maker who smokes some weed on the weekends and “don’t know nuthin about no delivery.” When Frank hears women moaning, he looks inside the next room and asks for their Green Cards. Iggy relents and says he’ll look into any future drug deals and get back to Frank. Outside the barbed-wire fence of Florida’s Region IV Correctional Facility, a man whose preference in clothing is black, walks along a side road. A car pulls up. Conversation is exchanged. When the Ex-Con places his hand on the door handle, the car jerks forward, leaving him behind. A woman is found floating in the Everglades by two drinking buddies. Fingernails in her mouth. Frank wants in on the investigation, but he’s reminded he’s now in Narcotics. Big brother Eddie, with the big house in the Hamptons, drops by unannounced. With one call to the precinct, he’s able to track Frank to his favorite drinking place, the South Beach shore. The two reminisce about their childhood together in New York City. When it’s clear Frank is too inebriated to drive, Eddie takes him to the Crestmore Hotel for dinner in the room and a good night’s sleep. When it’s time to go to bed, Eddie takes a nightlight from his luggage. Frank kids him about still being afraid of the dark and the monsters under his bed. Eddie asks Frank to take a few days off and visit with him at the beach house that’s almost completed. Frank tells him he has to meet with Iggy in an hour. Eddie suggests they meet later that day at the elite Spa-Tastic. Frank agrees. As Drew reads the Wall Street Journal in the lobby of the Crestmore, he misses seeing the Ex-Con enter the elevator, as his partner Frank exits. At the Blue Russian Bar, Iggy informs Frank and Drew that the drop will be at Miami Moon Drive that evening. While leaving, Frank notices Gloria hanging off the arm of the Russian known as Sergie. He confronts her and asks what she’s doing there. She replies, “Getting new business. I have employees and a payroll to meet.” Spa-Tastic requires Frank to fill in a ten-page application and pay $150.00 for a day pass. He mumbles something about his cheap brother and heads for the CO-ED sauna. There, Eddie enjoys the company of Natalie and Nadine and doesn’t notice his brother walk in. Frank interrupts and suggests they go somewhere more private. Eddie waves off his young beauties and says he’ll meet them later at the hotel poolside. A masseuse guides the brothers to a private room with their own Jacuzzi. After small talk, Eddie hints at his curiosity about what the Iggy had to say. Frank cuts the visit short announcing he can’t talk to civilians about cop stuff. When Frank and Drew arrive at the drug house, Frank gets “cowboy” and refuses backup. Luckily, Drew calls for it when Frank isn’t looking or listening. The two get in the middle of a shootout. Blood drips from all over Drew while Frank gets a few minor cuts. Extra patrol cars arrive, take down the dealers, and call for an ambulance for Drew. Frank refuses to go to the hospital. All his cop buddies are furious at him for nearly getting his partner killed. Put on leave without pay, Frank is told to go home and watch soap operas where he can do no harm to anyone. A female Officer is directed to escort him there. On the way, the pain from his wound starts getting to him. The Officer pulls a prescription bottle out of her purse and offers him a Vicodin. He swallows several. When he’s asked how many, he can’t remember but says he isn’t hurting—not no more. Gloria, hearing about the drug bust, goes to his apartment. The two women drag drugged Frank to his bed. Gloria tells the Officer to get back to her patrol. She’ll stay with Frank until he wakes up. She lies down next to him and falls asleep. Later, he nudges her and the two make passionate love. Gloria suggests to Frank that he check up on how Drew’s doing. Turns out he’s not as badly hurt as initially thought and will be out of the hospital the next day. While waiting for change at an all-night convenience store, Franks plays with a lighter on display near the cash register. It accidentally falls into his pocket as he leaves. A Cat-Like Woman approaches the Ex-Con at the Blue Russian. After dancing, he invites her to his lair. In the morning, she’s found dead in an alley--the third woman with fingernails in her mouth. At the crime scene, Eddie goes under the cross-barrier tape, only to be cuffed by an attending cop. He insists it’s okay because he’s Detective Pollard’s brother. Later he’s uncuffed and warned to get out and stay away in the future from restricted areas, no matter who he’s related to. The Miami police bring the Ex-Con in for questioning because he was seen at the bar with her the night before. Twenty-four hours later, there is no evidence against him, and the cops have to release him. A judge issues a warrant to search the suspects house, but Frank breaks into it first. A bloody knife on the floor. On the kitchen table, fingernails. When he hears “Police!” Frank boogies out through a back door. Gloria and her two employees, Ginger and Margarita, have dinner and drinks. Mr. Ex-Con walks up and asks how much they charge for their services. From out of no where, Frank pops up and remarks that he’s watching—all of them. Pissed, Gloria says good-buy to the two girls and walks out of the bar on to a dark street into the dark night, unaware that a male figure follows her. When she hears a foam cup bounce behind her, she freaks and runs across the street. A second figure steps out from between two buildings. She walks right into him and screams. It’s Frank. She yells saying he has no right to follow her like one of the department’s K-9s, but in the long run, she’s glad to see him. He invites her to spend the night at his place. At the apartment, while Gloria’s in the bathroom, Frank gets a strange call telling him to go to the Big Cypress Park Entrance that night. Then click, a dial tone. Frank and Gloria’s tryst that night starts out well and romantic, but Frank brings up her profession and they argue. As she leaves, pissed, she throws the gun he gave her, right at him. In the morning, the body of Margarita, Gloria’s girl, is found in a one-star motel room with fingernails in her mouth. A BOLO is out for the Ex-Con. Frank, upset at losing Gloria once again, sits at the bar at the Blue Russian, drinking a Coke but wanting Mr. Jack Daniels. A loud customer walks in; it’s Eddie with a woman on each arm. Frank lowers his head to keep from being noticed, but Eddie sees him and approaches. When he teases him about how once a drunk, always a drunk, Frank reminds Eddie that he’s married. At the entrance to Big Cypress, Frank turns off his car lights. A truck engine revs. A cat and mouse game takes place in the pitch dark. Suddenly, high beam’s aim at Frank’s eyes. He presses the gas petal as far down as it goes. The Mustang swerves to miss a tree. The truck’s not so lucky—crashes. Frank investigates the truck, only to be attacked from behind by the Ex-Con. He does a few moves he learned at the Academy. On the ground, the attacker’s out cold. Before an ambulance arrives, he takes a nail clipping sample and calls Drew, asking if he can have the DNA of the fingernail analyzed. Outside, Frank notices Eddie approach Gloria. Both laugh and talk. Eddie hails a cab and they both get in. Drew telephones saying the Ex-Con’s DNA isn’t a match to the fingernails found in the dead women’s mouths. In fear of Gloria’s life, he calls her cell to warn her about Eddie, only to get her voice message. Frank takes a chance and visits Eddie’s new house. Knocks. Hears Eddie’s voice inside. No answer. A garage door opens with a car idling inside. Frank enters. The garage door closes behind. He can’t turn off the car’s ignition because the windows are rolled up and the four doors locked. He tries the door going into the house. Locked. Shoots at the door knob. Eddie opens the door in a smoking jacket saying it would have been nice for Frank to have waited from him to let him in---and to please put away the gun. When questioned about how he found the address of the place, Frank tells him he’s good friends with the taxi company’s dispatcher. Frank asks about the running car. Eddie says he heard it’s good for the engine. Frank asks to see Gloria. Eddie doesn’t know anyone by that name. Frank says he saw both of them get into the same cab. Eddie replies that he shared a cab with a woman, but he didn’t know her and she got out several blocks before he did. Eddie wants Frank to leave, but Frank plays dumb, looking into closets and taking a self-tour of the house. He comments on the smell of Freesia. Eddie says it’s probably his maid who wears too much cologne, and he has to say something to her the next time he sees her. When Frank pokes around in one room too many, he gets knocked out on the back of his head. When he comes to, the only light source is a table lamp. Eddie aims Frank’s gun at him and waves his lighter in his other hand, saying he should have stuck to the house at Miami Moon Drive and kept his nose out of Homicide. Frank asks how Eddie knows about the drug house address. He replies that Iggy’s on his payroll. He also tells him that he didn’t know he and Gloria were seeing each other. It occurs to Frank that his brother was always not very far from the murdered women and was always bugging him about the homicides. But why did he kill these woman? Why did he kill his beloved wife Rebecca? Eddie says he does it for the thrill. His twenty-five year marriage died years ago. Almost the entire Miami PD was fucking Rebecca and Frank was clueless. He reminds him of all the weekends Rebecca flew up to New York to work as a borrowed cop on a special case? It was all a lie. She was screwing Eddie. One day Rebecca made a surprise visit and saw him in the process of killing a prostitute. She said she had to report him. She had done some awful things in her life, but she was not letting Eddie get away with murder. And he could not let her live to tell on him. Frank wants to know who the crazy fuck was who tried to run him over. Eddie says it was an old friend of his who owed him a favor. He deserved everything he got; he was a bad guy. Frank knocks over the lamp. Total darkness. Taunts Eddie about his dark and hidden monster fears. The gun fires. Frank runs out of the room. Locks it. Eddie fires his way out of the room. Runs down the hall to an unfinished room. Sticks his head in with the lit lighter. A karate chop to the back of Eddie’s neck. He drops the lit lighter. Fire! The brothers wrestle. A few hits in the right places knock Eddie out cold. Frank cuffs him and ties his ankles together. Demands to know where Gloria is, or he’ll let him die in the fire. Eddie mumbles that she’s in the trunk of his car. Frank pulls Eddie out of the burning room and down the hall. Leaves him. Runs down the stairs to the garage. Beams crack and fall from the unfinished room onto the roof of the car. Muffled sounds come from the car. The trunk’s locked. Tells Gloria to move as far back in the trunk space as she can. Aims his gun. Click. Out of bullets. See a tool rack. A crowbar. Grabs it. The ceiling falls, piece by piece. Pulls out the back seat with the crow bar. Gloria’s bound and gagged and barely conscious. A slow pulse. He pulls her to safety. A fire truck pulls up. Frank tells the firefighters his brother’s on the second floor and needs help. Gloria is wheeled into an ambulance. A few days later, Frank and Gloria lay flowers at Rebecca’s grave. Gloria says she is going to shut down the business and retire. Frank wants to know when. She’s not sure. She can’t just turn her girls out on the streets. He puts an arm around her and says, Let’s go back to my place. We can talk business later.”

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