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SAPPHIRES IN THE SHADOWS OF NIGHT
By John Richard Sullivan
On a desolate world, the Sapphires - an all-female tribe of skilled, determined fighters - must rescue their clairvoyant leader Diana, who has been abducted by the tyrannical King Jamus, before he expels her to the City of Demons.
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Determined to rescue their abducted leader Diana at any cost, the Sapphires must face a series of dangerous trials -- battling their way through King Jamus' Boys, Jamus' elite enforcer Dominae (who, unbeknownst to Jamus, has her own motive for wanting to confront the Sapphires), and eventually, the Demons of Hell Itself. Along the way they are aided by the genial Captain Stone, who may or may not be intentionally leading them into danger. A low-budget sci-fi/action/horror story inspired by such classic cult films as The Warriors and Escape from New York; surreal vintage rock operas like David Bowie's Diamond Dogs and Genesis' The Lamb Lies Down on Broadway; and Milton's Paradise Lost, along with the apocalyptic paintings of John Martin thrown in for good measure.
(Yes, the thumbnail pic is AL slop, but I can't draw.)
SAPPHIRES IN THE SHADOWS OF NIGHT
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Thanks for the ratings everyone! :-)
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Thank you for the rating, Claire! :-)
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Thank you for the rating, Jay! :-)
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Thank you for the rating Oleg!
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Same thing here...super cool premise but you need stakes. Consider including what would happen if she's not rescued.
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This sounds like a bold and stylized concept. The all-female warrior tribe on a rescue mission creates a strong central drive, and the mix of sci-fi, action, and horror elements gives it a unique tone. I like the added layers with characters like Dominae and Captain Stone it feels like there’s a lot of intrigue and shifting motivations.
The inspirations you mentioned also give it a very distinct, almost mythic and surreal vibe. Wishing you the best as you continue developing this world.
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Abhijeet, thank you so much for your rating and comment! That certainly helps with my confidence as a writer. :-)
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Thank you, Leonardo, for your input. Loglines can be tricky, since you're trying to include as much as possible in just a one sentence hook. I will certainly take your feedback to heart and make adjustments. :-)