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BAD IVORY

BAD IVORY
By Phil Mitchell

GENRE: Action, Adventure
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GENRES: Action and Adventure:

A group of army reservists are trained by the British SAS for a covert operation to eliminate as many African poachers as possible, but after shooting a poacher in the back and stealing millions in cash and gold from a dead ivory dealer, things take an unexpected turn elevating them all to the status of professional assassins.

SYNOPSIS:

BAD IVORY

With the elephant population being slaughtered at a rate of one every five minutes, the Kenyan embassy in London askes the British government for help.

A team of nine young British soldiers are quickly put together and trained in Wales by the SAS. After being shown films of the horrific slaughter of elephants and their young they are sent to Africa to kill as many poachers as they can.

But before they go to Africa, GRANT gets into a street fight on the council estate where he lives and kills someone.

Avoiding capture he will deal with the problem on his return.

After three weeks in Africa, the team kill thirty-five poachers, but one poacher is shot in the back and the national press gets hold of the story.

They are hurriedly withdrawn and sent to Tanzania where things are much tougher for them. Now they are up against the ex-military and they are shooting back.

After a gun battle with a crooked group of Tanzanian soldiers who have been helping the poachers, they leave Africa, leaving thirty of them dead.

Returning to England things take a turn when MI6 step in and form the guys into two-man hit squads. Their new targets are the people at the top of the chain. The people dealing in the importation of the ivory.

The teams are sent far and wide, Thailand, Hong Kong, Ireland, the USA, and even the UK.

On one mission, one of the teams hunt down and kill a dealer in Florida. Finding millions of dollars in gold and currency in his safe they come together and formulate a plan that will enable them to one day return to Africa as independent saviours of the elephants.

BAD IVORY

BAD IVORY

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Tasha Lewis

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Phil Mitchell

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Reid Pickett

This is an interesting story concept, but the characters' individual voices are often lost in military jargon and aren't very distinct. Its not an individual-character-driven piece, so that's not a huge deal, but your setting is also really nebulous. There's not much sense that any of the locations are different, anyone with a gun essentially seems extremely nonchalant about killing and the approach to the crux of the plot, the killing of the poacher, doesn't feel impactful. Its also really strange to have a reason for your squad to go to AND leave Africa be killing poachers and then have a story where people get mad when they do that when the anti-poaching forces from African nations already exist and engage in open combat with poachers in real life? There's just clearly very little work done on establishing the realities of poaching or really anything about the setting.

Phil Mitchell

I'm not here to defend myself to you. That's not what this site is all about.

But seeing who you are, I understand why you're the only person who would give a 1-star rating and feel compelled to comment so vehemently on a subject based in Africa.

It's not a documentary.

It's just entertainment.

And way back in 1966, there were no anti-poaching forces in existence.

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