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JINN'S PROMISE
By Christopher Poet
Jinn returns home, caught between a choice to save his daughter or break his promise.
SYNOPSIS:
Jinn has come home and invites a friend to his home. He has found a way to save his daughter, but at a cost. Jinn has two choices. To either risk destroying himself to save his daughter or to abandon his quest and break his promise. Lingering on the edge of this choice, Jinn dwells on past memories.
JINN'S PROMISE
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Strong writing but the flashbacks early do not allow a setting to be established early. You have to be able to care about Jinn and you can but flashbacks maybe can come after you establish just Jinn's life from the outset, at the point of decay. I don't know why but I thought about Kevin Spacey's character in Pay It Forward. You knew he was angry and had damage, but before that, you sort of understand the current aspects of his life.
William G Chandler Jr Hay man, thank you again for your comments. It has been a while since I last posted and I just want to let you know that a new draft of the script has been posted! I changed out the PDF and edited the Synopsis too. I would love to hear what you think of the new piece!
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