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PIPER

PIPER
By Katy Dore

GENRE: Drama, Historical
LOGLINE:

1948: Her family is relieved when a talented young woman, determined to gain independence through her music, leaves the jazz club circuit and joins an all-girl traveling orchestra. But she soon puts her job, her future and her safety at risk when she falls in love with another woman. 

Tasha Lewis

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Molly Peck

Hi Katy, this sounds like a really good story! The only issue I'm having with the logline is that the two parts (joining the orchestra/falling in love with a woman) don't feel connected - as in, what about joining the orchestra spurs the musician to fall in love with a woman? I think maybe adding "spurns the conservative ways of post-war America" as a description of the traveling orchestra could help this - so it would read, "After joining a traveling orchestra where she learns to spurn the conservative ways of post-war America" or something like that. Great work!

Nate Rymer

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