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FUERZA

FUERZA
By Ralph Henriquez

GENRE: Science Fiction, Action
LOGLINE:

Wrongly framed and honorably discharged from the military, a Park Ranger gains superhuman abilities through an extraterrestrial encounter and must stop an impending alien invasion while uncovering the conspiracy that destroyed her career.

SYNOPSIS:

Wrongly accused and forced to accept an honorable discharge that derails her federal career, a disciplined U.S. soldier retreats from a life of service and takes a quiet post as a U.S. Park Ranger at Fort San Cristóbal in Puerto Rico. Beneath the historic fort, she encounters an ancient extraterrestrial being of pure energy known as an Astralite, which bonds with her and transforms her into Fuerza, granting her god-like superhuman abilities. Warned of an impending invasion by parasitic galactic forces intent on consuming Earth, Fuerza is tasked with becoming the planet’s protector—an obligation far greater than her personal pain. As she learns to wield her immense power responsibly, she also begins uncovering the truth behind the conspiracy that framed her out of the military, choosing to stand for justice and humanity’s survival rather than give in to revenge.

(Screenplay available upon request.)

Leonardo Ramirez

Hey Ralph Henriquez - the premise sounds interesting but there is still some information missing or that could be succinctly stated. What's unclear is the betrayal and what it cost her. Also, why is the being hidden beneath the fort? The stakes sound global which aren't stated in the logline.

Here's the logline template that I use:

“After ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective and the protagonist's position/role) tries to _______ (goal of story) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”

Hope this helps!

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Ralph Henriquez

Thanks for the feedback, Leonardo Ramirez. I'll look to modify it a bit. I appreciate you.

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