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When her terminally ill father can no longer lead their pack, a wolf princess uses help from her friends to stop her destructive brother from dethroning their father and destroying the forest.
SYNOPSIS:
The forest of Tall Trees is at the height of its prosperity. The leader of the forest is Beto, and his wolf pack have become the backbone of the forest. Beto learns he has a terminal illness and begins the process of choosing his successor, either his sin Leo or his daughter Lia. Lia is distinctively different from the rest of the wolf pack and doesn’t have the leadership role her younger brother has. Not to be outdone by her brother, Lia has built a great relationship with their sister forest Weeping Meadows lead by the wise wolf Tate. After Beto leaves the forest in the care of his kids, Leo doesn’t want to leave the future of the forest to chance and begins a path of destruction. With his gang of rouge wolves, he captures Tate and destroys the ecosystem of the forest. Lia is forced to flee the forest and sets out to build the Weeping Meadows Forest while Tate is gone. This rebuild doesn’t last as Lia is forced out by the Griffin, the protector of Weeping Meadows, due to her connection to Leo. Lia wonders and finds her place amongst a group of displaced animals who accept her as their own. Leo sets out to kill Lia but destroys Weeping Meadows instead. Lia decides enough is enough and returns to Tall Trees for confrontation with Leo, to decide who will accept the birthright to the forest.
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Hi Jackson, this is a very small thing, but I would take out the "the" before help. It doesn't flow quite right with the sentence. This is a cool concept, and I'd be excited to read the script!
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Molly Peck, thanks for the feedback. You're right, it flows better with taking "the" out!