I can’t decide.
“A faint smile touches his face — lingering.”
or
“A faint smile touches his face — and lingers.”
8 minutes on this.
Why.
(But still.)
Curious to hear your thoughts — which one feels right to you, and why?
Screenwriting : 8 minutes on this line. by Deborah Bete
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It's that way sometimes, Deborah Bete. Spending a lot of time on one line. I like "A faint smile touches his face — and lingers" more. It sounds better in my opinion, and it grabbed my attention more.
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Agreed, Maurice. "... and lingers" has more weight IMO. "Lingering" doesn't feel as strong a motive. Like Hitchcock said, "You can write 'A man walks into a room,' but HOW does he walk in?" Sometimes it takes much longer than 8 minutes :)
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Yeah, lingers sounds more suitable. It's so direct oriented.
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I choose — and linger Maurice Vaughan Dale Wolfe Aleksandar Lahtov