Screenwriting : Looking for feedback and possible reps/interest from producers by Mukhammed Ali Bolyspekov

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Era Zero sounds interesting, and catchy title. I suggest adding an adjective for the scientist (the main flaw the protagonist has to overcome in the script or an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality) and the stakes.

Poster has a typo: erased.

Yeah. I caught the typo right away. While typos per se aren't enough to preclude a read - lord knows I have found typos and the wrong homonym (there/their) even after dozens of re-reads. I can imagine that typo on the cover page is enough for anyone to not bothering to read further.

When you take a shot at the king - you better not miss.

Isn't this a poster?

Thank you for pointing out my typo. English is not my native language, I'll be more careful from now on.

Yes friend. I wouldn't even think about looking for an agent until you've had your script thoroughly reviewed both for language syntax as well as spelling. And to be honest, you're better off building a catalogue of work and an audience before you go seeking representation. Even if you get someone to take a look at what you've created and even IF they like it, the most likely question they will ask is "What else have you got?"

Hi! Producer here. Some feedback on your Logline. I would define the protagonist a bit more. What kind of scientist? What makes this character compelling and for an audience to lean in? (For example: a grief-stricken scientist). You also should clarify the inciting incident since "resetting humanity to the Stone Age" is a little vague and generalized. The goal here -- "rebuilding civilization" --also seems a bit ambiguous. Is this rebuilding a new civilization? Also, what is at stake? Overall, your Logline should really hook people into your project, and more specificity to yours would greatly improve it. Best of luck to you!

Way to vague Mukhammed Ali Bolyspekov

Hi Kristy,

Thank you so much for your feedback — I really appreciate you taking the time to look at my project.

The full details and structure are explored more thoroughly in the PDF script.

If you're open to it, I'd love the chance to discuss it with you in more detail via direct chat.

Only the logline is visible on the project page — the full synopsis is written in my profile bio. Thank you!