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TANKS OF THE SOMME
By Jason Sacchi
After the incident at Ypres, the British dispatch a tank squadron, led by a determined officer, to crush the German Defenses at Somme.
SYNOPSIS:
Captain Finley Adams leads the British Soldiers to escort the tanks for a breakthrough the German Lines.
TANKS OF THE SOMME
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Hi, Jason Sacchi. I think your logline needs more info. Here’s a logline template that might help:
“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the main character’s personality and the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ _______ (an adjective that describes the main character’s personality and the main character’s position/job/career) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”
And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).
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Thank you all for your input.
You're welcome, Jason Sacchi.