Lynn P. H. Adrian: Screenwriter in Denmark, Wisconsin.

This looks wonderful! Bravo to all involved! :-)

Very Nice!

Nice. Poetics of Space.

No problem

Thank you, Alle, you are such a plethora of information. Thank you for all your generous contributions to threads throughout Stage 32--I read all of them I see.

Thank you, Diane. We used Celtx with a adolescent writing project call Wakatataskenh^ (I'm Trying My Best) in 2009, and you are spot on--it's awesome.

It's awsome and very inspirational. Thanks for the post!

Very Very cool!

that's lit

One way to get some sponsorship is making a crowd-funding video on Indiegogo or Kickstarter. I made a crowd-funding video for 'The Paintbrush' after it was made but you can make one in pre-production. You obviously can't make an actual trailer of your script but you can talk about the story and be specific in what you want to do with it (cast, location, techniques etc). Say it all with passion! Lots of luck on your script! XD

Packing that much poignancy into two minutes is awesome. I really enjoyed that. Thanks...

"Come to my Window...."

As a copywriter, I use Grammarly for an initial proofread, as it will point out some basic issues and it has improved, with regards to syntax issues and incorrect grammar and punctuation. Its suggestions have improved as well. It might not be cheap, but it's much better than a majority of the other add-on software.

However, it's by no means foolproof. Google is your friend - you can check some basic spelling and grammar via its search engine. There are a plethora of grammar guides on there, and you can also utilise online thesaurus' and dictionaries.

Nothing will ever beat a thorough readthrough, even if you use software like Grammarly. And even better than your own set of eyes - a second pair of them is the ultimate way to spot any issues with spelling, grammar and punctuation. Buddy up with a trusted scribe, share and proof each other's work.

https://writerduet.com is great especially if you wind up collaborating as often happens.

Those are good choices. Thanks to Angelina and Pat! Way to share guys!!

It's actually in the lower P.

Welcome to the lowlanders club.

Awwww Yisssss! I grew up in Waterford/Pontiac. I miss home bad.

Sorry - didn't mean to hijack the thread. D. Marcus - of course you have a valid point, but without a synopsis or, better yet the script infront of you, you're not going be able to put the feedback in context. In my own defence, this script is pretty action packed as it is without having to focus all the action on one character. The film starts off with dual protagonists, brothers Eamonn and Christy. At the mid-point in the story Christy is killed (as happened in real life), from that point on the story follows Eamonn's life as an IRA rebel. The storyline is plenty compelling as it deals with family conflict, national conflict and international conflict - just it doesn't all focus on one individual who had a small part to play in freeing his country. Mike - Thanks, I'd love it if you wanted to show the script to an Irish-American producer. Would a message to Bord Scannán na hÉireann yeild anything tangible? I know they are involved in funding and training, but if you think they could put me in touch with someone... that'd be cool. Michael - Please see above re. protagonists in the story. The character of Eamonn is my grandfather. No offence, but I would not do his memory (or that of any of the main characters) the disservice of turning him into an all action hero when he wasn't. He was simply one small cog in a much bigger machine. The story is mainly from his POV and I think it works fine to have the heroic actions performed by others. Eamonn's character development is complex and multi-layered, just like the real human being. His physical journey takes him from a 17 year old teenager to a volunteer, to a company commander who leads a failed action at the end of the conflict (this in itself is inflating his actual role in the ambush). His emotional journey takes in the sulky, idealistic teenager in conflict with his older brother who joins the British Army in France, conflict with his parents as a result of this, guilt at the death of his brother before any chance of reconciliation, experiencing the horrors of taking a life, falling in love (and protecting his sweetheart from the shame of rape and unmarried pregnancy), burying his father, the fear of arrest and execution whilst on the run from the law, witnessing atrocities committed by both sides in the conflict and eventually coming to terms with all the changes in his world as a young married man. I think this is enough for any film!

Exactly what I said when I wrote my comment, Simon. I have not read your script. There is a very real possibility that your script is exactly right and the reader's comments were out of line.

The movie is a story. It's not history come alive. Events may have to reordered, characters combined, and the hero more active than in reality. Your duty is to story not to history

Star Trek forever!

Q'apla

Nice. Wow.

That's real nice! Great job, Phil!

Wow! Intense. Great work, Phil!

Hi Mugaya, bit far for me to come, I'm afraid.

Thanks, C. T.

Thanks, Kelly. Happy New Year to you, too.

Thank you for reaching out with art.