THE STAGE 32 LOGLINES
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UNSEEN
By Nikki Baker
In the last days of WWII, a group of Allied soldiers take on a routine mission to liberate a German interment camp, but soon discover they might have unleashed an evil far more sinister than the enemies they’ve faced on the battlefield.
SYNOPSIS:
Four hardened soldiers find themselves at a very unusual concentration camp at the tail end of the war in Germany. The longer they remain on their mission the more unsettled they all feel. It’s because they are being hunted by something their battle experience has not prepared them for.
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Without a clear, and singular, protagonist, you’re not able to introduce a clear strength/flaw description for the character either, which leaves your ensemble description broad and not nearly as interesting as it could be. I would highly suggest focusing your logline on the protagonist and mention they are part of a group of Allied forces. I hope that helps!
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Nikki, love the concept, but I agree with Karen that the logline should focus on a protagonist, their need, and the conflict they find themselves in.
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