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After getting into trouble with the law, Darby is sentenced to house arrest. Now she is legally confined to the same house she used to share with her ex-boyfriend, which he now shares with his beautiful new fiancee...
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Heather is one of the most gifted, brilliant and talented writers I know. She helped me take 4 of my scripts and turn them into something that can be marketed. I see big things happening for her and the skies the limit. Way to go Heather!!!
Sounds like great fun Heather!
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My question is 'why' is she confined to the same house she used with her ex.? Should be a plausible explanation.
You could also skip her name, and instead describe her (flaw). a "headstrong woman" ,an "young woman" etc.
When [INCITING INCIDENT OCCURS], a [SPECIFIC PROTAGONIST] must [OBJECTIVE], or else [STAKES]
(a) inciting incident: Darby is sentenced to house arrest
(b) the protagonist: Darby
(c) conflict: she is legally confined to the same house she used to share with her ex-boyfriend, which he now shares with his beautiful new fiancee
(1) what is her objective-what must she do to get out of this predicament?;
(2) what are the STAKES? And can you make them PRIMAL