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STUCK
By Heather Turman

GENRE: Comedy
LOGLINE:

After getting into trouble with the law, Darby is sentenced to house arrest. Now she is legally confined to the same house she used to share with her ex-boyfriend, which he now shares with his beautiful new fiancee...

J.A. Brown

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J.A. Brown

Heather is one of the most gifted, brilliant and talented writers I know. She helped me take 4 of my scripts and turn them into something that can be marketed. I see big things happening for her and the skies the limit. Way to go Heather!!!

Rutger Oosterhoff

Sounds like great fun Heather!

Focussing on the logline:

(1)

My question is 'why' is she confined to the same house she used with her ex.? Should be a plausible explanation.

(2)

You could also skip her name, and instead describe her (flaw). a "headstrong woman" ,an "young woman" etc.

(3)

When [INCITING INCIDENT OCCURS], a [SPECIFIC PROTAGONIST] must [OBJECTIVE], or else [STAKES]

You have:

(a) inciting incident: Darby is sentenced to house arrest

(b) the protagonist: Darby

(c) conflict: she is legally confined to the same house she used to share with her ex-boyfriend, which he now shares with his beautiful new fiancee

...but:

(1) what is her objective-what must she do to get out of this predicament?;

(2) what are the STAKES? And can you make them PRIMAL

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