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HIGH BELIEFS PILOT
By Mike Heff
Two stoners in Los Angeles hunt for fame
and fortune by documenting paranormal activity with the help of their supernatural roommate.
SYNOPSIS:
In the wake of a very public UFO event in the skies of Los Angeles, roommates Evan and Goose both strive to become internet stars. Evan has capitalized on the event by falsely claiming to be an alien abductee and using a new age guru persona to gain a viral following. Goose jealously watches Evan’s star rise while he struggles to get a measly hundred views on one of his prank videos. When their new roommate Fred enters the house, Goose comes up with a way to steal Evan’s fame by planning an epic prank that will make Evan believe he’s actually been abducted by a UFO. Things get real for everyone when Fred reveals that he is being contacted by some sort of alien intelligence and he needs Evan’s help to decipher the coded message in his head.
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