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A group of friends weren't expecting, but now have reached their 50's. When their "Father" figure dies, they are left to navigate life with no direction and learn life is less complicated with the family you choose.
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In the story, the friends address alcoholism and how it separated some of the group.
Katie, as well as Thomas examines the mental toll of infidelity and why self worth is far more important than shying back into a relationship that is more harmful than status quo. Marshall and Cassandra learn, although they don’t have children, they actually might make good parents...For other people’s children. Elizabeth teaches that a friend is a friend, even at 7000 miles away. And DK learns, dreaming is never an escape but a quest. Through all of it, we learn of love...Friendship Love and Suppressed Love. We all have our place and in that group of friends, all those places combined to make the perfect person...All while loving Fleetwood Mac.
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The story sounds a bit like The Big Chill which is pretty complex. The punchline of the logline is that a bunch of people will come to realize something that is largely understood. Maybe tease a crisis, or a major change in a character's outlook on life? Best of luck.
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Sounds like an interesting story, JR Rodriguez. I think your logline needs some work. I suggest removing "Adulting is not for the faint of heart" and "Life is a tough hustle, but also kinda funny." They sound like taglines.
Here’s a logline template that might help:
“After/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion), a _______ (an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality and the protagonist's position/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes).”
The inciting incident can also be at the end of the logline: “A _______ (an adjective that describes the protagonist’s personality and the protagonist's position/role) tries to/attempts to/fights to/struggles to/strives to/sets out to/fights/battles/engages in/participates/competes/etc. _______ (goal of story and try to add the obstacles here) so/in order to ________ (stakes) after/when ______ (the inciting incident/the event that sets the plot in motion).”
And Christopher Lockhart has a great webinar on loglines. It’s called “How To Make Your Logline Attractive to A-List Actors, Producers, Directors, Managers, Agents, Financiers and Development Execs” (www.stage32.com/webinars/How-To-Make-Your-Logline-Attractive-to-A-List-A...).