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LOVE BOUNDARIES
By Shay Meche

GENRE: Romance, Drama
LOGLINE: Ryan and Charlee have hid their feelings from one another since they were 14, but when they move in together they struggle to keep their feelings intact.
Kevin Johnson

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Nathaniel Baker

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Molly Peck

Hi Shay, I like this idea but I have a couple ideas to make your logline stronger. First, how long has passed since they were 14? Starting the logline with, "Ryan and Charlee have hid their feelings from one another for 10 years" would have a bigger impact. Also, "keep their feelings intact" is a bit ambiguous. Clarifying what the two are feeling would help draw the reader in.

J.B. Storey

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Maurice Vaughan

Hi, Shay Meche. How about this for the logline: "Having hid their feelings from one another since they were fourteen, a ______ (adjective) man (or position, job title, or career) and a _________ (adjective) woman (or position, job title, or career) move in together and struggle to keep their feelings intact."

Maurice Vaughan

And I agree with Molly Peck's comment about "keep their feelings intact."

Nate Rymer

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Gen Vardo

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