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Two rival high school football players discover they have the same dad and he’s married to both their moms. They decide that the winner of the big game keeps dad for himself, and wacky sabotage ensues
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“Winner Takes Dad” is a teen/family comedy, as familiar as any teen rivalry film. It’s a fresh, hilarious approach to a typically dramatic subject, yet carrying an underlying honesty about the affect bigamy has on the families involved.
Danny Smith plays for the Knights. Donny Smith plays for the Wildcats. As their teams head for the inevitable championship showdown, they discover they are half-brothers: Dad is married to both their moms. With teenage hubris, they decide to let the winner of the game keep Dad, while the loser goes away forever; this way only one family is torn apart. Neither boy is confident of his chances of winning, so they embark on a series of zany sabotage schemes, until it becomes more about beating the other guy than about saving their families. The pranks escalate until Donny is declared ineligible to play, and they realize how high the stakes really are. Ultimately, the boys learn that family – even family you didn’t know you had – is more important than winning.
“Winner Takes Dad” uses the successful techniques of other high school comedies (including the right amount of gross-out humor and peer pressure), combined with the universal message of the importance and strength of family bonds, to appeal to a wide audience.
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A bit long but a really like it. Should be fun!
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Interesting premise. I'm wondering how the Moms handle the situation.
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This is a really fresh approach! I like it... here is my version of the logline.
When two teenage football players find out they have the same dad but a different mom, one needs to win a big game to win his dad exclusively.
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Thanks, guys! The script is ready to go out if any producers get interested. It's weird though: in my notifications, the title is listed as THE MARCH OF THE 18TH - where did that come from?
Yes, I was asking myself that same question. Maybe contact stage32 about it.
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A nice twist on an interesting plot, and I can see the comedy potential in the storyline are endless. Love the Title. Should get interest with this one.
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Good logline and synopsis. Apparently, the 'standard' is for a Logline to be a single sentence. I don't know how important that really is ...but it would be easily achieved with a small change to what you have written. Well done!
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Love the story! I hope someone picks it up I would love to see it!
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Thanks again, everyone! There's progress: it's being pitched to a producer at Hallmark over the holiday. We'll see!
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Good luck John!!
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