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A quirky and introverted writer is blindsided when her best friend creates a bogus Tinder profile of her hoping to find her a date for a Valentine's Day gala.
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Jazmine Anderson is an introverted, socially awkward 26-year-old writer who becomes single after suffering a devastating break-up. Still reeling from her break-up, Jazmine attends unconventional yet holistic therapy sessions to help her cope with anxiety and stress.
Jazmine's best friend Neesha is tired of seeing Jazmine alone and comes up with a plan to establish a Tinder account in Jazmine's name in order to find Jazmine a new beau for a Valentine's Day gala. Neesha does a good job juggling the prospects on the dating app by faking as Jazmine until it's time to meet the prospects face-to-face.
What Neesha doesn't realize is that Jazmine, in a meeting that was pure happenstance, has met someone.
While writing trying to meet an overdue book deadline, Jazmine's computer crashes and she finds herself at the computer repair counter where she meets Landon.
28-year-old IT Specialist Landon Tronfield is as quirky as Jazmine and the pair are a perfect match. The pair seem to be getting along fine until Landon's roommate Sean causes confusion when he lies to women using Landon's name. Sean's stalker, a woman named Mercedes, makes Jazmine think Landon is her boyfriend when in reality Sean is the man she's after. The confusion creates a rift between Jazmine and Landon, but it doesn't take long for the two to make-up.
Meanwhile Neesha has invited several Tinder prospects to her Valentine's Day gala to meet Jazmine, not realizing that Jazmine and Landon made up and Jazmine has invited Landon as her date for the gala.
Everything comes to a head at the gala as Neesha tries her best to referee the prospects who are eager to meet Jazmine, unbeknownst to Jazmine. The entire plan is thwarted when Jazmine realizes what Neesha has done.
In the end, Jazmine forgives her friend as Landon and Jazmine fall deeper in love.
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A great opener, for sure. I would look at seeing if you can introduce a little more of the story beyond the set-up. This is a common issue with a lot of loglines that only cover first act detail. Some focus on what's at stake would really help,. Who is the antagonist? Who provides the conflict here? Consider those queries. Here if I can be of any further help, Lakesa.
I agree with Phil, LaKesa. And I suggest restructuring the logline so it's clear who the protagonist is. Right now, it sounds like the best friend is the protagonist since she has the goal ("hoping to find her a date for a Valentine's Day gala"). Hope this helps.
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Thank you all for the feedback!
You're welcome, LaKesa.
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