Screenwriting : Weak antagonist by Brian McAndrew

Not sure why you find this a weak antagonist. Sounds like there's a ton of potential here.

I, too, see a lot of potential there. Not a weal antagonist at all. So much you can do.

Your antagonist's perspective is interesting. While he may have a limited social skills approach, is there an opportunity to show off another trademark of Aspie's, like a fascinating tangential focus on some detail he's picked upon and everybody glosses over? His awareness of that detail could be the saving grace to the story. I bet you have already considered that. Is this a comedy or dramedy or a drama?

Drama. I guess I stand corrected.

I find my characters gain focus as I give them dialog. It a first draft, so I can always trim and condense later. Keep writing.

The real antagonist is her hidden sexuality.

You could make the antagonist despise his sister's lover so much that he will absolutely not permit the two to continue their relationship. Not only is he worried for the breakup of his family but is concerned that he will lose his sister if she continues to see this person. Perhaps in the end the sister's partner does something to redeem herself in the eyes of the antagonist and all ends well.

What if Aspie is secretly in love w his sister's girlfriend and he's afraid if his sister comes out, the family will disown their daughter and Aspie won't get to see the love of his life anymore?

Watch Woody Allen films. The true antagonist can be a very subtle creature.

It's slang for Asperger's

I love the idea! I think this has FANTASTIC comedy potential. I wouldn't go the subtle route if I were writing this. I think you should crank it up to 11 and milk it for all it's worth. The central pull of the character is obviously that he has this blackmail but he can't communicate it. This gives you so many opportunities for laughs, quirky memorable moments, and most of all for the audience feel tension for the characters. Don't bury your antagonist! Make him big and complex! It's a movie, not a documentary about aspergers.

I agree with Miss Berry. The brother could make rude comments when he sees them together threaten to tell parents, of course he would make that sound worse than death. Siblings know each others buttons and how often they can be pushed. If it bothers him that much he'll probably push all the buttons frequently. Just a suggestion.

How about the brother being gay! He makes the excuse it is because of the family being religious...But... he does not want his family to know that he is gay... If his sister comes out, they may start to question him also about his sexual preference... He hides behind his humour... many a true word was said is jest.....Not even the sister has caught on to the fact her brother is gay....

Janet I def was thinking that of the brother!!

I think it would work Jax.... would make for an interesting story. I came up with a brilliant ending also ... to pack a punch... in how to resolve the dilemma... DEPENDS on the theme of the story though.

NICE!!! I def would be interested in watching the puzzle come together.

I like the idea also.... My mind would take me to... The lad is the only son of a well known business tycoon, who expects his son to take over the family business one day... problem is, his father is totally homophobic...you could also add a neat little twist at the end here... talk about twisting the twist lols.

@Jane i'm diggin it!!!

I hope Brian is flat tack at writing the script lol.

Hmm. I viewed his previous script, he needs a work on his craft.

My advice. Have him be a closeted gay man. He is afraid of coming out, but jealous of his sister's courage to come out.

The idea is good.... could be woven into a real good Movie.... with twists and turns...

@marvin I am working on honing my screenwriting skills.

Good answer, sir.