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BREATHE: ONE DAY. ONE STORY. ONE BREATH.
By Geoff Hall
A young poet wrestles with her identity and purpose as a writer, until she is visited by her older self, who imparts the wisdom of years and helps her to hear the voice of Nature.
SYNOPSIS:
Tagline: Isolation can seem like a curse, but it’s also a means to cleanse the lens of your perception.
A wilderness experience. Sometimes to know ourselves we have to unknow ourselves, unravel the illusions to reveal the True Self. She needs wisdom from someone, somewhere, but who will provide it?.The trees that she so loves? A wiser woman, perhaps? The Poet needs to feel empowered to enter the world again and leave her isolation as a writer behind.
(This is a non-narrative script, about consciousness. There's no inciting incident, as it's all about flow and the stream of consciousness).
BREATHE: ONE DAY. ONE STORY. ONE BREATH.
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Could use a little more plot, but I'm sufficiently intrigued by the mystery.
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Wow, Matthew Parvin that was quick. And thanks for the rating. It's actually an non-narrative piece, so no 'plot' as such. I've just written a post on the November Write Challenge page about it. Will post the link in a minute...
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Matthew Parvin here you go:
https://www.stage32.com/lounge/november_write_club/Breathe-One-day-One-s...
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Hi! Could I ask that you don’t just rate the logline, but that you also post a comment, as I’d like to know the reasons for your rating. It all helps me. Thanks.
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I enjoyed the script, Geoff Hall. I know this is an Experimental story, but I think the logline still needs to be clear so people will understand what they're about to read (the script) or see (when the film is finished). In your synopsis, you wrote, "A young poet wrestles with her identity and purpose as a writer, until she is visited by her older self, who imparts the wisdom of years and helps her to hear the voice of Nature." I think that's your Experimental logline right there! :)
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Maurice Vaughan Thanks Maurice, I have updated the typo and additional spaces and uploaded the new version. I will also amend the logline! Thank you so much for your help.
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You're welcome, Geoff Hall. Sorry, I didn't see your comment until today.
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It´s beautiful to read how a young writer learns from her older self and her connection with Nature.
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This could be very interesting, especially if both the younger and older self show character transformation.
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Leotien Parlevliet thank you, Leotien. I’m sorry, I’ve only just seen your comment. Thanks for your kind words.
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Robin Gregory Hi Robin, thanks, the older poet is the transformed younger poet.
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Interesting and popular premise. Many people would like impart wisdom to their younger selves.
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Geoff Hall I love the "heightened reality" aspect of this!
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Robert Sacchi that’s it in one.
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Robin Gregory ah, there’s that phrase again. The more we talk about it, the more I believe it should be our pursuit as writers. Thank you.
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Geoff Hall "Every great oak started out as two nuts who held their ground."—Henry David Thoreau