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MAJK
By Martin Reese

GENRE: Fantasy
LOGLINE:

Spurred by the murder of his fiancee by a supernatural, a detective becomes the first human member of a police force that investigates crimes committed by and against supernaturals

Ally Shina

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Maria Johnsen

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Maria Johnsen

Well done Martin, It sounds very appealing and thanks for sharing such an awesome logline.

Brian Shell

You need a descriptive adjective to describe your protagonist detective in this logline... likewise with the supernatural entity. How does the supernatural enter our reality? What is "its" portal to our world?

Jacqueline Hicks

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Jacqueline Hicks
Jacqueline Hicks

Needs a few adjectives..

Anthony Moore

Try this: "A grieving detective, becomes the first human to join a task force that investigates crimes committed by and against "supernaturals" in order to solve the otherworldly murder of his fiancee."

Martin Reese

Thanks for the comments everyone.

Martin Reese

Hi Brian. To answer your question the series imagines a world where humans live side-by-side with supernatural/mythological beings. So your neighbor could be a vampire. Your co-worker could be a werewolf. You walk down the street and see a centaur. it's a normal part of life. You need a police force that specifically deals with supernaturals.

Martin Reese

Not bad, Anthony. I will look at that.

Brian Shell

Maybe "hard-boiled detective" and add perhaps "any and all supernaturals"... the ones the guys from Ghostbusters miss - just brainstormin' and spit-ballin' ideas to help percolate your logline so it isn't as generic... and more specific to the exact kind of Villian(s) (or Antagonists) that your (gripping adjective) detective encounters in your script. Hope it helps...

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