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THE MAGIC OF SHIRKAN
By Evelyn von Warnitz

GENRE: Fantasy
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Born as an oversized cat with preternatural abilities THE MIRACULOUS SHIRKAN fights in successive episodes commissioned by the hidden-kingdom of good-naturenes ghost AMANUNET against the negative power of ARES who shows up in human beings. 

THE MAGIC OF SHIRKAN

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James Drago

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James Drago

Hi Evelyn. This seems like an interesting world you're looking to build. The logline is "thick". How can you cut it down. Star with "An oversized cat with preternatural abilities" and then put what he hopes to accomplish and what the obstacles are. Start there and see if you can cut it down by a few lines!

Evelyn von Warnitz

Hello James. Thank you so much for your nice comment and advice. It is indeed too long. Just here is a lot SHIRKAN has to tell about this world we are living in and how it COULD be better. I will shorten it.

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Christopher Poet

I love the feel and sound of this concept, but for a logline, you are a bit too detailed/long. I advise to remember the logline only needs to set up the initial concept, nothing else. Explanations can be left to the synopsis. Keep it short, sweet, to the point, and intriguing. Make the reader want to know more.

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