Thank you, Nick, SO much! That last line didn't flow, I knew that, but I couldn't find a way out before. Would you mind taking a look at my new logline and telling me what you think? PLEASE :) Thanks ♡

Since it’s comedy, perhaps you want to highlight her funny traits more than these in the logline— label whores, desperate jocks, toxic stereotypes, and her own low self-image. I really like the way you describe yourself in your profile. Pretty funny. You can do the same here. Good luck!

Thank YOU, Pattana, for your precious advice!!! My screenplay's a kind of Teen dramedy that combines elements of comedy and drama - more comedy than drama. I'm working on the logline, hoping to capture the spirit of my story. I can't thank you enough for your invaluable help :) I just read your logline and synopsis... "BUDDHA'S SHADOW" sounds VERY interesting!! I wish you every success!

Hi, Kacee :) I'm sorry you didn't like my logline at all, but thank you for taking the time to read it. May I ask you why you gave 1star rating to my logline (in a positive way, please)? I hope you didn't find my logline too much of a cliché for you, because my script is far from a clichéd story. It struggles against clichés, but we can't ignore the reality that we live in a stereotyped world and we must confront bully cliques, toxic stereotypes, and our own insecurities, but it's not a female makeover film. It differs from other comparable films because the hot popular guy is not embarrassed to be seen with the nerdy outcast girl at school, he definitely doesn't want to "fix" her; on the contrary, he's been in love with her since FADE IN: she simply doesn't realize it yet. It's an inner journey she makes to love herself and find the courage to be loved for who she is. Even though it's no biopic, most scenes are really personal as far as the experiences that I've had in my life. I was bullied at school too, teased, and called horrible names for being a roly-poly nerdy girl. I still am a confirmed nerd, and a lot more than a cultural cliché. PS: I've learned to love myself over the years, but there are and always will be too many people thinking they know me after a few minutes or judging me by appearances.