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ROBOTI-K
By Wilmer Villanueva
SYNOPSIS:
In the year 2093, the world is marked by the presence of androids that have radically transformed human life. At the height of this technological revolution is the Grey Corporation, the absolute leader in the global artificial intelligence market. However, after the death of his wife, founder and CEO Matt Grey decides to seclude himself on a private island, plunging the corporation into a slow but imminent collapse. Into this scenario appears Jake Crawford, a young robotics engineering intern who, against all odds, is sent to the island with the mission of convincing Matt Grey to return and regain control of the company. However, Jake doesn't travel alone: he is accompanied by Winnie, an android designed with an advanced empirical psychology system, whose objective is to assess Matt's mental state and determine if he is fit to continue leading the company. The mission seems clear, but it soon becomes a labyrinth of dilemmas. As Winnie applies her protocols to analyze Matt's mind, the interaction between the two awakens unexpected feelings: genuine emotions that shouldn't exist in an artificial being, and a mutual attraction that challenges the boundaries between human and robotic. What was supposed to be a simple psychological evaluation transforms into a budding love affair, fraught with ethical and emotional tensions, complicating not only Crawford's mission but also the fate of the entire corporation.
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Thanks, Vivek and Nathaniel
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A Fascinating premise and a really good story!!!
Thanks William!
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Thanks Ben!
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Perfection!
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Thanks... Arthur and Juno!
Thanks Mr. Lance!
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Thanks Chantel!
Thanks Erick, you are very kind to say so
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It sounds to me like a futuristic version of classical movies/books like "The Invention of Morel" or "Forbidden Planet". Great concept!
Thanks Carlos
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Reading the logline and synopsis made me want more, I was disappointed there was no screenplay to read - personally, Wilmer, I wasn't convinced with your logline ending, "to assess his mental health" - too tame - I would prefer you suggest some sexual tension as in the female-looking robot was sent to "persuade him to return". Cheers.
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I think the word order of the logline could be re-jigged for an easier read. It felt like information was leapfrogging itself. My attempt for you:
Following the death of his wife, a robotics tycoon isolates himself on an island to grieve. His concerned corporation send a female android to retrieve him but instead they fall in love putting the company in jeopardy
It's a cool premise, I must say though, it has eerily similar vibes to Ex-Machina. If you haven't seen it, check it out and maybe think about what sets your story apart from it?
Thanks Channel for your notes. They are always well received.
Thanks Adam, I like logline better as you put it.
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What's the jeopardy?
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just reading the synopsis, I can see the act structure so clearly- I thought of Ex Machina too. Intrigued by these 'tactical android'- have a Terminator Salvation type scene in my head, but I'm sure it's much more subtle than that.
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I liked it, also. It sort of reminds me of a twilight zone episode where a prisoner is shipped to a deserted planet as punishment, however, they send him a female robot to keep him company. It’s called, THE LONELY.” Not your story, but good 1/2 hour of your time worth watching? :-)
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Could start with "When" so that "his corporation" doesn't feel disjointed. But still love it.
Thanks Kathryn, for the information and for taking the time to read the synopsis.
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Love the premise Wilmer Villanueva. I suspect you have the stakes in mind but I would consider adding them to the logline. Is there a goal for the protagonist? What happens if he doesn't accomplish it?
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Hi Leonardo, keeping a little mystery always helps in the synopsis. Don't you think?